As Connor & Blake follow the mysterious person into the galaxies snow planet and we can see the bright snow coloured moon.
Suddenly Blake fall through the soft elegant ice so Connor had to jump into help him Connor Brock the ice and pulled Blake to safety. “Are you alright” “how did it happen” yes i am alright just freezing.”
This week we have been learning about DASH? paragraphs for adventure stories.
- D = describe the setting
- A = use action
- S = use speech
- H = describe how the character is feeling
- ? = use a cliffhanger or rhetorical question
We wrote collaboratively and used a writing frame for this learning task, then we wrote our own paragraphs today
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ReplyDeleteHi Connor my name is Viliami.I am a year five in Hay Park school in Auckland.
ReplyDeleteThe first thing I would like to say is that this is AWESOME!Also is this a word cloud?I like how your name stands out because it is all about you.My class did this but it was often about what we normally go on.The most thing I go on is my email.One thing you could to make this better is to change the orange colour to maybe a light colour because I can see the small words that are orange.
Feel free to comment on my blog called Hpsviliamik@haypark.school.nz
Your Sincerely
Viliami